-Thesis:
You might postulate the only audience of polyvore.com to be teens and young adults by using fashion trends of risque, vintage, and cropped clothing through a variety of blogs but it also receives negative attention from older adults by using fashion trends that resemble Disney characters.

• My idea of making an argument about a websites use of risque clothing which resembles Disney characters creates a great argument that is also defending a major mass media company and children of the younger generation (Disney)

• My thesis has improved tremendously because as I took the time to free-write on my paper, I discovered arguments within a argument. Meaning, my main argument, lead to new arguments which I constructed into paragraphs. This process has strengthen my thesis which lead me into completing a draft.

• I believe that blogging has gave me freedom to express my ideas which led me into developing theses.

Weak Thesis:You might postulate the only audience of polyvore.com to be teens and young adults by using fashion trends through a variety of blogs but it also receives negative attention from older adults by using fashion trends that resemble Disney characters.

Strong Thesis: You might postulate the only audience of polyvore.com to be teens and young adults by using fashion trends of risque, vintage, and cropped clothing through a variety of blogs but it also receives negative attention from older adults by using fashion trends that resemble Disney characters.

The thesis was weak because it didn't go into detail on what type of clothing and it wasn't enough information to state an argument. My strong thesis opened up a variety of arguments because I went into details on what type of clothing brings negative attention and I can make an argument about the disadvantages that specific clothing brings about when reflecting the appearance of disney characters

• The subject of my paper discusses how a website of innocent blogger who love to express their sense of fashion can bring negative to a particular without being aware of the consequences.
• My thesis brings about morals and values that people of the older generation have when dealing with provocative fashions o a company that will not only affect their children's childhood but a company's reputation.